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Four drabbles tonight. The theme was "Structures," as in houses or places or what have you.



Harry/Sirius, "The flavor of morning" (challenge by [livejournal.com profile] sparrohawk)

Sirius has given Harry all the water in the pail, and his fever still won't break, and the scrap of cloth that was Sirius's shirt doesn't have enough dampness left in it to sponge anything. Not Harry's fevered face, not the wound in Harry's thigh with its now-sweetish smell, not the ugly red streaks starting to spread into his groin and torso.

He bangs on the cell bars for nearly an hour at a time, using the empty pail. Yelling. Pleading.

No one comes.

Five days later, a host of dead Death Eaters in his wake, Dumbledore finds them.

Sirius's presence, draped over the corpse, lips pressed to Harry's forehead, has kept the rats at bay.

Too blinded by tears to be sickened, Dumbledore brings Sirius out of the dungeon cell, and takes him to face the impossible, hateful morning.




Snape/Sirius -- Every force evolves a form. (challenge by [livejournal.com profile] cluegirl)

"You cannot possibly sit down."

"Why not?" Sirius shrugged as he did exactly that, plopping himself down onto the floor of the dodecahedron. "Our wands aren't having any effect on the walls of this thing. Might as well get comfortable and wait for rescue."

"You cannot 'get comfortable' in this thing, Black! We've got a pentagonal space one-twelfth of the surface structure to stand upon in here. If you sit I can't--you'll be--"

"Touching you?" Sirius leered.

"Yes! A fucking pox on all Death Eaters who can count beyond three. A triangular pyramid trap would have accomplished the same thing and given us more standing room."

Sirius appeared to consider this. "But standing in a triangular pyramid, our heads would be awfully close together, wouldn't they?"

"You--! That's not what I--!"

Sirius snagged his robe and pulled him sprawling. "Shut up and give us a kiss."




Harry/Ron -- The beauty is that everything changes (challenge by [livejournal.com profile] cluegirl)

"Your mum expects to see you under that, one day," said Harry in a quiet moment, looking at the gazebo.

"Yeah, well. 'Spect she thought I'd be under it before Ginny." Digging his hands deep into the pockets of his formal attendant's robes, Ron turned to look at his sister. He'd never seen a girl look more beautiful, in those white bridal robes of hers. From the way her groom's besotted smile never wavered, neither had Neville, apparently.

"Maybe--" Harry wasn't speaking loudly, but none of the guests were near--"Maybe another night we come out here. Just by ourselves. Your mum doesn't need to know."

Ron snorted. "For what? A private ceremony, or just a good al fresco shag?"

"Bit of both, maybe."

"You're an absolute nutter, you know." But Ron's smile said he didn't think it was a bad idea at all.




Snape/Draco: "You've got everything now" (challenge by [livejournal.com profile] cursive)

"Very nice," said Snape, making a show of studying the Malfoy Manor entryway with his hand under his chin. "Of course, the front door will have to go. That crest. I might paint the whole door magenta, actually."

Lucius wheezed. Poor Lucius. Azkaban really had been hell on the man's lungs, hadn't it?

"You...!" Narcissa was ready to say more, but her husband's hand gripped her arm. "Not. Another. Word," Lucius snarled.

Draco, however, had words. "I always knew you were a bastard, Snape, but this tops everything. The ministry said we could stay if you agreed! You didn't have to throw us out!"

Snape smiled. "'Us'? Dear boy, you are not going. In fact, I insisted you stay."

"...You did?"

"Of course. The ministry terms guaranteed me a concubine. Lucius, Narcissa, you've overstayed your welcome. Good-bye. Tweezle, please show Draco the outfit he'll be wearing. With the corset."

"DAA-AD!"

Date: 2004-05-21 08:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] just-clodia.livejournal.com
Bloody brilliant the last one!

Date: 2004-05-22 04:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
Thank you! It was fun, writing over-the-top humor like that!

Date: 2004-05-21 08:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] flimpy.livejournal.com
I adore the last two. Gazebos, awww! And *gasp* Snaco FLUFF! :))

Date: 2004-05-21 08:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] brevisse.livejournal.com
Love the angst- especially the last sentence of the first story. It's so powerful. Was the play on "morning" and "mourning" intentional, or am I just reading to much into all this?

The humour was wonderful- mm, corsetry- and I adored the geometry geek! love. Lovely dialogue.

*adores*

Date: 2004-05-22 04:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
The play on words--you are NOT reading too much into it, because though I did not do it consciously, I was finishing the drabble and pasting it below the challenge line and I looked and said. "Morning. Mourning. Oh, dear god, you MUST have done that deliberately in the back of your brain somewhere."

Thank you thank you!

Date: 2004-05-21 09:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cellia.livejournal.com
Broken by the first one.

Giggled at the last one.

Date: 2004-05-22 05:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
[livejournal.com profile] cellia!!! There you are! Oh, how fabulous, you're lj'ed and everything! (So happy you liked the drabbles!) The website looks so PRETTY!

Date: 2004-05-21 09:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] anjenue.livejournal.com
Heeeee! whiny!corseted!Draco! Oh, you do know how to make a girl's heart flutter!

Date: 2004-05-22 05:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
I NEEDED whiny!Draco just then, and whiny!corseted!Draco just seemed to make the whole thing even tastier for me, hee!

Date: 2004-05-21 09:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emi-hime.livejournal.com
The first one had me in tears! Not so much that Harry dies (because in fandom he dies altogether too much) but the image of Sirius using up the last of his water and then hoarsely pleading with an empty bucket in his hands...

I love it. I absolutely love it.

Date: 2004-05-22 05:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
Oh! Now you're making ME tear up. Wibble! Thank you so much for this!

Date: 2004-05-21 10:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] satanbaker.livejournal.com
Aww, I love GinnyxNeville... p_q *smacks self over head* Ehem! Anyway! First one..o.o very interesting. Loved the last one. Draco in corset. Hee.

Date: 2004-05-22 05:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
It's okay, I love Ginny/Neville too! I like pairing them because they feel right together (and that way I don't have to read Neville slash or worry about Harry/Ginny. ^_^). Thank you!

Date: 2004-05-21 11:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] noblerot.livejournal.com
The Smiths make good drabble music (and pretty girls make graves). So.

Harry/Sirius: Your description of the stench from Harry's wound... urrr. Perfect. And the "impossible, hateful morning"... equally perfect. You do death and mourning well. I mean that as a compliment.

Snape/Draco: Lucius wheezed. The last gasp of a great house. Oh, the ignominy! Oh, the hilarity!




Date: 2004-05-22 05:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
(The icon is a HOOT!) Pretty girls make graves, and I'll meet you at the cemetry gates, where I want the one I can't have...Ahem.

*wibbles happily over the idea that you think I can do death stuff justice! And, of course, humor, since everyone says comedy is harder, but I'm still an angst slut. Smooch!*

Date: 2004-05-22 01:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dphearson.livejournal.com
Snape/Draco: Dear god. Very clever indeed!

And the Harry/Sirius- way to to break the heart, there. Argh!

Date: 2004-05-22 05:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
Ooh, thank you! I needed to go off in an unexpected direction with that Harry/Sirius, just 'cuz I'm like that sometimes--flouting expectations. ^_^

Date: 2004-05-22 02:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sodomite.livejournal.com
I loved the first one; the last one made me laugh. The Snirius one was interesting because of the geometry thing. =D

Date: 2004-05-22 05:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! The geometry thing just popped into my head when Cluegirl gave the challenge line; I thought, "They're trapped inside a big dodecahedron." I never said my brain worked conventionally! ^_^

Date: 2004-05-22 05:38 am (UTC)
ceilidh: (A clue!)
From: [personal profile] ceilidh
Harry/Sirius: *sob*

Snape/Sirius: *snerk* Go Sirius!

Ron/Harry: Awwwww. *loves*

Snape/Draco: *cackles*

Excellent as always!

Date: 2004-05-22 07:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
Hee, thank you! Love the range of emotion I got outta you. ^_^

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Date: 2004-05-22 06:34 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] everythingisaid.livejournal.com
The Sirius/Harry was painful to read.

The Ron/Harry, though, was adorable. Aw!

Date: 2004-05-22 07:32 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
I don't know why I hurt the ones I love so much. ^_^ But only in writing!
Thank you!

Date: 2004-05-22 07:08 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] noirenails.livejournal.com
You are genius. The last one killed me.

Date: 2004-05-22 07:33 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
*blushes* Thank you! Draco's so useful for that kinda nonsense. ^_^

Date: 2004-05-22 09:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] waccawheels.livejournal.com
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh *cries*

But so brilliant. But so heartbreaking.
Waaaah

(Don't ask me which drabble I'm talking about. I'm sorry, but I've been in Sirry-Only mood for a good while...:/)

Date: 2004-05-23 03:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
No, definitely no need to ask which one! Can I say that your Sirry-love is a ROCK to me, a rock to cling to when all about me people are talking about the Percy ficathon and the Harry/Neville fests and other pairings that just don't inspire me to fic, and when I think of how much I love and weep for and fantasize about this pairing, the thought of "Wacca and Glockgal and Nimori! They love the Harry/Sirius and will always be there with me, waaaaaah!"

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Date: 2004-05-22 10:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cluegirl.livejournal.com
A fucking pox on all Death Eaters who can count beyond three. That line still makes me giggle helplessly.

That, and "DAAA-AD!"

I smooble you!

Date: 2004-05-23 03:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
Eee! *is smoobled* Geek geometry lurve and Whiny!Draco! See, those topics were great and made my day complete. *smoobles back*

Date: 2004-05-22 11:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] daletnomiko.livejournal.com
YES! Please send me whatever you have on that FAB picture. Those are two GIRLS dressed as BOYS making out?
That's hot in a way I never thought possible.
My E-mail: Cobaltshy@tds.net
*thank you*

New Stuff!

Date: 2004-05-22 05:43 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
1. Ohhh, how horribly sad. Or sadly horrible. Your attention to detail sharpens the reality of the story, again -- the "now-sweetish smell" of the thigh wound is wonderful (well, not wonderful, it's darn near time for amputation, but you know what I mean). The bit with the rats reminded me of ElfQuest -- an early sequence where Redlance is dying in the desert, and his lifemate Nightfall is hovering over him, sobbing as she fights off the vultures.

2. I liked it, although -- or perhaps because -- it sounds like a newly-discovered sketch from The Kids In The Hall. (Multimedia commentary tonight, I guess.)

3. Forgive me. I just can't take H/R seriously. For what it is, it's very well done -- the descriptions of Ginny and Neville are brief, evocative, and cute. But I couldn't help it -- when Harry says, "Your mum expects to see you under that, one day," I thought, "Ron's mom wants Ron buried under the gazebo!?"

4. This, on the other hand, is the first page of a twelve-issue mini-series in Prestige Format on acid-free paper. I can see exactly how big Draco's eyes get when he bellows, "DAA-AD!" Excellent.

Wonderful, sweetie!

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Sobriquet :)

Re: New Stuff!

Date: 2004-05-23 03:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
1. Is it gangrene, or is it blood poisoning? You decide! Two great tastes in one! Er, sorry. ^_^ Thank you for the feedback on this one in particular--I can't help it, I love making my boys weep over each other.

2. Now I'm trying to cast the sketch of this one and failing. My widdle brain.

3. *dies* Just...dead. DEAD, okay? (Gazebos are not for burying! Gazebos are for MARRYING! You silly creature.)

4. Oh, grief. Big-eyed anime!Draco! In a corset! And a collar, of course. Can't have all that without the collar, y'know!

Date: 2004-05-23 10:06 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_hannelore/
Harry/Sirius: Aiiiiiiiiiiiiie! Grab me by the throat and throttle me some more. Ouch, ouch. Lovely. Every sentence quotable.

Snape/Sirius: Hee! Oh dear, maths.

Harry/Ron: Still giggling at the "al fresco" shag...

Snape/Draco: "DAA-AD!" Dear whiny, petulant Draco. Corseted, even!

Date: 2004-05-23 03:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
Throttle throttle! Hee. I really liked getting to do this to Sirius. I know, I'm awful.

Oh dear, maths.
Sputter! Oh, man, that's SO quotable, isn't it?

You make me giggle so. Thakn you so much!

Date: 2004-05-23 11:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] soawen.livejournal.com
Sirius appeared to consider this. "But standing in a triangular pyramid, our heads would be awfully close together, wouldn't they?"

Bwahaha! And who said that Sirius never was one for using his brain?

My absolute favorite would be Snape's "That crest. I might paint the whole door magenta, actually." I knew he was vindicative, but magenta?!

Date: 2004-05-23 03:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
Whee! You know, I'm certain that Snape hates magenta too, but he HAD to go for something that would get just that reaction out of Lucius. The wheeze. Had to have the wheeze. Thank you so much!

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Date: 2004-05-23 11:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] twistingflame.livejournal.com
Oh, the first is just gut wrenching, while the last made me giggle unashamedly. Much love.

Date: 2004-05-24 05:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amanuensis1.livejournal.com
Ooh, such a range of reactions! Thank you so much; I am so tickled!

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