Drabble Night, Oct 22, 2004
Oct. 22nd, 2004 11:36 pmGot back to drabbling for a bit! The theme was "Sins of the Flesh," and I did three.
Harry/Voldemort, consensual spanking. (challenge by
goseaward)
"Your choice, pet."
Harry, hands at his sides, presses the pads of his thumbs against his curled index fingers. It's what he does, now, instead of clenching his fists. That's too much defiance for Voldemort to let pass--so, instead, this.
He decides. Not difficult, really.
Instead of speaking his choice aloud, he acends the few steps to the dais and kneels next to Voldemort's chair. Like a pocketknife, his naked body unfolds to drape itself over his Lord's lap. He does not allow his head to droop, mercy though it would be, but stares straight ahead.
Humiliating, but less so than the alternative.
"One day," coos his Lord, "you'll call me Master freely, instead of choosing the punishment."
Harry does not reply--only watches the twin looks of lechery and disapproval on the faces of Snape and Malfoy, as Voldemort delivers the first slap.
Snape/Hagrid, masturbation. (challenge by
sparrohawk)
Nights in the dormitory are the worst. He won't be one of them, making those rustling noises as obvious as a herd of hippogriffs--or that utter stillness behind a Silencing Charm, no less embarrassing. As if the great disapproving eye of God's on you.
Showers--forget it. Severus won't even linger longer than a few moments there, for fear of an accusation about taking so long.
Secret places in the castle--there aren't any of those. Not with Bloody Black and Poncy Potter and Lunatic Lupin and Precious Pettigrew's eyes on him, all the time, hunting him like the little sneaks they are.
Which is why he's here, at the edge of the Forbidden Forest.
"Hullo!"
Severus, pants about his knees, nearly has a heart attack right there--but silently bewails the deflation of his aching prick most of all.
It's the bloody caretaker. Is there no place to have a goddamn fucking private wank around this fucking school?
But the bulky caretaker--Hagrid--only leers--no, wait, it's a grin--and takes out a handkerchief the size of a small tablecloth and tosses it to Severus.
"Kinda close quarters in that castle, innit?...You come here when y'like. I won't tell. Or watch--promise."
Severus never does go back. But he keeps the handkerchief.
Snape/Dumbledore. Gluttony. (challenge by
venivincere)
Albus feeds on Severus's mouth as if he's been denied sweets all week. Which isn't true, Severus knows; he can taste pepper imps with every kiss, and there was no mistaking the squeak of ice mice earlier that evening.
He laps at Severus's chest as though the salt sweat there will cure an imbalance in his humours. Which, Severus thinks, could explain some of the man's eccentricities.
He feasts upon Severus's cock as though it is a gourmet's rare delicacy: an oyster or other shelled creature, still damp from the sea, tender and ready to be coaxed to unshy vulnerability. Severus has never known a lover so ravenous.
Once Severus made the suggestion they bring a jar of honey or cream to bed. "My dear, whatever for?" Albus had said, with a quirk of one eyebrow--and resumed his feast.
Harry/Voldemort, consensual spanking. (challenge by
"Your choice, pet."
Harry, hands at his sides, presses the pads of his thumbs against his curled index fingers. It's what he does, now, instead of clenching his fists. That's too much defiance for Voldemort to let pass--so, instead, this.
He decides. Not difficult, really.
Instead of speaking his choice aloud, he acends the few steps to the dais and kneels next to Voldemort's chair. Like a pocketknife, his naked body unfolds to drape itself over his Lord's lap. He does not allow his head to droop, mercy though it would be, but stares straight ahead.
Humiliating, but less so than the alternative.
"One day," coos his Lord, "you'll call me Master freely, instead of choosing the punishment."
Harry does not reply--only watches the twin looks of lechery and disapproval on the faces of Snape and Malfoy, as Voldemort delivers the first slap.
Snape/Hagrid, masturbation. (challenge by
Nights in the dormitory are the worst. He won't be one of them, making those rustling noises as obvious as a herd of hippogriffs--or that utter stillness behind a Silencing Charm, no less embarrassing. As if the great disapproving eye of God's on you.
Showers--forget it. Severus won't even linger longer than a few moments there, for fear of an accusation about taking so long.
Secret places in the castle--there aren't any of those. Not with Bloody Black and Poncy Potter and Lunatic Lupin and Precious Pettigrew's eyes on him, all the time, hunting him like the little sneaks they are.
Which is why he's here, at the edge of the Forbidden Forest.
"Hullo!"
Severus, pants about his knees, nearly has a heart attack right there--but silently bewails the deflation of his aching prick most of all.
It's the bloody caretaker. Is there no place to have a goddamn fucking private wank around this fucking school?
But the bulky caretaker--Hagrid--only leers--no, wait, it's a grin--and takes out a handkerchief the size of a small tablecloth and tosses it to Severus.
"Kinda close quarters in that castle, innit?...You come here when y'like. I won't tell. Or watch--promise."
Severus never does go back. But he keeps the handkerchief.
Snape/Dumbledore. Gluttony. (challenge by
Albus feeds on Severus's mouth as if he's been denied sweets all week. Which isn't true, Severus knows; he can taste pepper imps with every kiss, and there was no mistaking the squeak of ice mice earlier that evening.
He laps at Severus's chest as though the salt sweat there will cure an imbalance in his humours. Which, Severus thinks, could explain some of the man's eccentricities.
He feasts upon Severus's cock as though it is a gourmet's rare delicacy: an oyster or other shelled creature, still damp from the sea, tender and ready to be coaxed to unshy vulnerability. Severus has never known a lover so ravenous.
Once Severus made the suggestion they bring a jar of honey or cream to bed. "My dear, whatever for?" Albus had said, with a quirk of one eyebrow--and resumed his feast.
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Date: 2004-10-22 09:29 pm (UTC)Oh. My. God.
That's beautiful. Just beautiful.
And what a satisfaction in the face of the contempt of the world - that he is Dumbledore's feast.
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Date: 2004-10-22 10:45 pm (UTC)I couldn't possibly have put it better.
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Date: 2004-10-23 09:06 am (UTC)That is just too sweet, and too lovely. A perfect summation of Amy's bit here.
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Date: 2004-10-22 09:48 pm (UTC)My fav is the Harry/Voldie one.... I love your writing.... Is dead.
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Date: 2004-10-23 02:03 am (UTC)I love all your drabbles, but these must be among your best IMHO :)
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Date: 2004-10-23 03:37 am (UTC)The first really packs a punch, and I love the analogy of Harry's body being like a pocketknife. Your capturedbutnotbroken!Harry is one of my loves of the fandom and here he's as stubbornly defiant as ever :)
The second made me chortle and the third made my eyes boggle. In a good way.
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Date: 2004-10-23 09:08 am (UTC)You should not even called them drabbles, I think. They are more like those minitaure potraits in watercolor that you find the artists at Giverny doing. Small, yes, but not a color wasted.
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Date: 2004-10-23 03:52 pm (UTC)For some reason, the Snape/Dumbledore actually works and it's one of the few pairings I hate more than Harry/Hermione.
I'm not entirely sure how you managed that. It snuck in past my guard.
But I'm damn glad it did.
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Date: 2004-10-24 01:38 pm (UTC)[...] an oyster or other shelled creature, still damp from the sea, tender and ready to be coaxed to unshy vulnerability.
Mm...this may be one of the most perfect phrases I've ever read.
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Date: 2004-10-24 01:49 pm (UTC)*has sudden craving for oysters*
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Date: 2004-10-25 04:51 pm (UTC)*loves, as always* Mmmm, quietly-defiant!Harry. And snarky Snape voice. And yesss, feeling the love in that last one - can't quite describe it, there's a depth there that's....
And As if the great disapproving eye of God's on you. Dude, I was instantly transported back to a dorm room there, and it's been almost ten years. *grins* Perfectly worded, AND I smack my forehead and think "That's exactly how it is! The incriminating silencing charm, duh!"
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Date: 2004-11-18 12:44 pm (UTC)I missed reading your stuff so much! *is determined to start playing catch up*
The first one - I loooove prideful Harry. Looove him. I know you do too, which is why I loooooooooove the way you write him. He won't be defeated because he's a Gryffindor, after all. And it's all the little details of his defiance that are both for brave and so tragic.
presses the pads of his thumbs against his curled index fingers
I can't always tell when I'm enjoying a bit of writing when I try to imitate what's described. And yes, here I was, reading and doing this, just to feel the fulll length of Harry's emotional state. You are so good with that.
Like a pocketknife, his naked body unfolds to drape itself over his Lord's lap.
And this. Ohhh, what a beautiful image. Whip-sharp and potentially deadly, but here, all Harry can be is supplicant. If only to demonstrate his defiance. Aaah! So much complexities in so little words. The little additions of Snape and Malfoy being there only adds, hints and intimates at the story that could form around this. When something as small as a drabble can manage to encompass so much more, it's just, like. Yes. Wonderful. I love it when there's more.
The second -- aaahahahahaha! Oh, it's fantastic, and kind of sad. Well, really sad. Poor Snape! I LOVE the way he rules out each location (the bit about the silencing spells being TOO silent is so GOOD! Because it's trueeeeeee!) and the names he has for the MWPP!!!! FWAAAHAHAHAH! I was just reading it with a big goofy grin on my face because. You know he came up with these himself and doesn't share them with anyone because they're so silly and kinda lame, but they just make him so happy to refer to them as such in his head. So perfect. And the last bit, like. I love the little twist at the end, it just makes it all so perfect and with the right amount of quirky flavour. It's so thought-provoking and suggestive and, best of all, naughty. Hee!
The last - most definitely a pairing I'd never ever even think about and of course you made it sound so utterly fantastic. Oh my god, does Snape sound delicious. I love that you start off with minty flavours and then cool shellfish; everything about it seems so washed and clean and white, which is very much how snogging with Albus should be. It's not innocent, but it's not dirty. You totally establish that so well, and mmmm. My mouth's all watering just rereading it! Crazy. You are just too good.
<3333333333333!!!!!!
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Date: 2004-11-20 02:38 pm (UTC)You know how much I love unbroken Harry--oh, so very much! And the idea that you were so into it--so into a short little drabble--that you found yourself imitating Harry's actions--bwee! And yeah, there's a bigger story in there. The use of the "pocketknife" simile made me aware of that. ^_^
The silencing spells bit in the second one--heck, having someone NOT hear you in those circumstances but still knowing exactly what's going on is just as bad! And yeah, the way Snape has come up with those names--they're not meant to be terribly clever, right, they're just in his head and they make him smile.
The third--see, with Albus, nothing is innocent and nothing is dirty. It's all just human and feeling and, oh, you know what I mean. Don't you even get the feeling canonically that Albus is no kind of a prude? A total flower-child? Hee.
*hearts you back INTENSELY!!!!*