Drabble Night, May 14, 2004

[amanuensis1]

Tonight's theme was "Travel." We got an interesting assortment of subjects, as a result!

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Snape, Lucius, Japan, and a portkey. (challenge by cluegirl)

"Such a short season, the cherry blossoms have."

Severus paused on the bridge, looking down. The blossom-strewn water surface almost hid the swimming carp below.

"But I prefer it when they have begun to fall. Many a poet has been inspired by their snow-like appearance. I'm sure you can see why."

He descended the curvature of the bridge. The red was easy to follow in all that white.

"I doubt you are pleased it ended this way. But try to appreciate the care I chose for your resting spot, yes? Despite my poorer upbringing, Lucius, I have as much taste as you."

As the cherry blossoms continued to descend, speckling the corpse most elegantly, Severus resheathed the blood-wet sword. The handle of the shorter shoto blade at his waist, hitherto untouched, settled neatly against his palm as he bowed...and vanished.

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Sirius/Harry -- Orient Express (challenge by cluegirl)

"When does the murder happen?"

Sirius straightened too quickly once again and hit his head on the upper bunk. "Ow! Harry, would you please give it a rest? That joke was old before I purchased the sodding tickets."

Harry bounced on the mattress, as enthusiastically as the low ceiling above the upper bunk would let him. "But you promised to show me everything! All the famous landmarks, all the travel forms that're landmarks themselves. Including the Murder on the Orient Express."

"For Merlin's sake, the Orient Express was famous long before that bloody-minded old bat got herself a writing hobby!"

"You think Miss Marple and Hercule Poirot were doing it? I always thought so."

"That's it! Get down here or I'm coming up there."

"Love to."

Harry overbalanced and ended up falling from his perch, Sirius under him.

"Oops. Sorry. So, is there going to be a murder?"

"Yes. Yours."

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Snape/Harry, flying carpet (challenge by venivincere)

"I told you there were advantages to flying carpets that broomsticks simply did not have," Snape said, or at least, that was what Harry suspected Snape was trying to say, because when one's most hated professor's complete-and-utter-bastard act started to get sexy as you got older and he in turn began to notice that his sneering pronouncements were making his most difficult student squirm in a very different kind of way and they found on one detention-scheduled night exactly where that kind of thing could lead and they began looking for opportunities to get away from Hogwarts Castle so that their not-entirely-sanctioned trysts could continue and then Severus had suggested this and Harry was presently on his knees gripping the carpet and feeling the wind buffet his naked body and Severus had his tongue buried deep in Harry's arsehole...well, sometimes you just had to get certain things from context, right?

Comments

[isiscolo.livejournal.com]

Woo, what fun! The first is my favorite, very elegant. The second is cute, and the third made me grin! All one sentence, whoosh!

Sorry I left but I got dumped and felt too icky to bother trying to make it work.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

I was all, "Where'd she go? Where'd she go?" Missed you very much, I did!

Feel better, love.

flying carpet

[jenna-thorn.livejournal.com]

sometimes you just had to get certain things from context, right

Right! And all in one breath, too. This one is great.

Re: flying carpet

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Hee! Thank you--I'm so glad the sense of urgency came across in that one! (And ooh, look, I get the Snapefic icon!!!)

[sabinareborn.livejournal.com]

They're all wonderful, of course, but that first one was particularly *lovely*. It's so poetic, so subtle, and the picture that you paint is just as finely crafted as the words you use to paint it. I can imagine the delicate pink cherry blossoms and the golden karp, "the curvature of the bridge," lucius on the ground, panting perhaps, panting, defeated, eyeing Snape as he approaches calmly -- he knows he's won -- and makes his parting speech. Snape, he's so elegant in this. The words, the bow. The fact that all the words are his. I love this one.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Oh, my, thank you! I was having such a hard time with that one, trying to keep to a simplistic Japanese feel to it, and yet trying to remember that there did have to be Potterverse characters in there. And Snape is just as much a snob as Lucius--a literary snob, in my mind, but no less elegant. Thanks so much!

VERY cute!!

[legacylady.livejournal.com]

These were GREAT! I couldn't pick a fave among the three because they were all so different.

Kudos on doing such a WONDERFULLY HOT job with such a short amount of words!

Re: VERY cute!!

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Oh, yowza! Thank you so much! (Must keep TRYING to work more smut into these things!)

[(Anonymous)]

Yay! I've figured out when you guys drabble!

1. Ooooh. And Lucius has... er, had the long white hair that goes so well with yaoi. No details on his funereal kimono? ;)

2. Funny. And... Miss Marple did it in the Bedroom with Poirot? At some point, I half-expect Harry to turn to Sirius and say, "Mister Wizard, how do turtles do it?"

3. ...

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... Where can I get me one of those?

Why, whichever one you think I mean.

Lovely as usual, dear!

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Sobriquet :)

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

1. Heh. I like to think he never got a funeral after that duel. Just got covered with cherry blossoms and went to bones. Morbid, ain't I?

2. "HARRY! This is science, not a brouhaha!" Wahhhhhhhh! You always know just what to reference to get me howling!

3. Um, if you're looking for a Snarry, get me one too? 'Cuz Froogle is, like, NO help.

[florahart]

This last made me laugh loud enough I was glad I was alone. Context. Sheesh.

NOTHING DEAR!!!

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Snape's an articulate guy, but, I mean, REALLY. ^_^

[everythingisaid.livejournal.com]

The first one painted such a vivid picture, and the second and third made me laugh. I enjoyed them all.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Oh, hooray! I love providing diverse moods. Thank you!

[gmth.livejournal.com]

Oh wow. That first one is so amazing. I'm picturing Snape in a scarlet and yellow kimono, and that's a very pretty image. :-)

And the Sirry is so cuuuuuuuuuuuuute.

The third one made me pant as I was reading it, just 'cause it's such a long damn sentence and there was no place to take a breath. Heheh.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

You've got Snape in Gryffindor colors! That's--pretty cool, now that I think of it.

I'm pretty sure Sirry is my favorite consensual Potterverse pairing, and that that's gonna be that way for a long time.

And suuuure you were panting just because it was a long sentence. Nope, rimming had nothing to do with it. Nope nope nope.

*does naughty thing with hips*

[lifeinwords.livejournal.com]

Mmm. Loved them all, as usual, but the last especially. Lovely slow unveiling, very funny.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

(Yippee feedback! Your icon's cracking me up.) Thank you so much!

[angiepen.livejournal.com]

The first one was very beautifully imaged.

The second one had me giggling. I love brat!Harry when he's well done. But just for the record, I don't think Poirot ever did it with anyone -- it would've messed up his mustache -- but if he did it wouldn't have been with a girl.

The third one started out sort of, OK, whatever, then got interesting, then just kept going. By the end I was cracking up. :D And a grammatically correct sentence THAT long! I'm impressed! [applause]

Angie

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Brat!Harry! Oh, I need more Brat!Harry, now that you say that, I do. Mmm.

And don't applaud so quickly--that sentence really did need some commas before the "and"s but I just couldn't interrupt the sense of onrushing sexual excitement to put 'em in. It felt WRONG, I tell you, WRONG! ^_^

[desdomonda.livejournal.com]

Eeek! ummm, I loved the drabbles very much... one problem though. I didn't actually understand them. Not your fault though, It's 3 in the morning and I think I'm sick.. and not the good sick (because we already knew I was that) the Bad kind of sick. As in sweating, voice loss and insomnia... oh, wait, the insomnia's always been there. but the rest is all new. I promise a better review when I can think properly. But I think it says something for your writing when I can enjoy it when I can't follow a sentence properly. I think I'm lucky I could pull it together to ramble here at all. and I am rambling.... Yeah have you ever written something, then re-read it and not remember writing some of it? Boy, I feel awkward. Anyway, I"ll be doing this when I feel better, so you can have some now ::fangirls:: now I'm taking my insomnia elsewhere.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

*gives you fluids, comfort blanket, and uninterrupted nap time* Awwww! Get sleep and take it easy. Hee. I'm still happy you had a good time with these!

[justinetre.livejournal.com]

I loved all three of these, I seriously cannot pick a favourite!

Incidently, RL Friend and myself were just gearing up to go see Troy, and to get us in the mood we were reading your "And Just Plain Wrong". That story is just so brilliant

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

AJPW gets you in the mood to see TROY??? Man, you've GOT to explain that one to me! Does Paris get caned or something???

[jeddy83.livejournal.com]

The first drabble really captures the sense of serenity that overlies Japanese culture. And the second made me laugh.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Ooh, I faked the Japanese thing! Thank you so much for that!

[fyrie.livejournal.com]

You know, the imagery of that first drabble makes me want to paint it. In a very arsty style. Merf!

*coughs* Completely unrelated, but hope you like it anyway :)

[nocturnali.livejournal.com]

Is this what happens when Harry Potter meets Homer Simpson?

[nocturnali.livejournal.com]

I was a bit worries after the first two. You seemed to have a bit of a 'death' theme happening. But all was well.
I had to read the last one three times. One sentence, and it had to be read quickly. *L*
Loved them all. Thanx.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Eee! No, thank you! And Harry wasn't in any danger in the second one. Well, Sirius might spank him. But no REAL danger. ^_^

[sodomite.livejournal.com]

haven't been online for ages. wonderful work. love the first and last ones, especially the first.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! You always know just what to say. *does pleased dance*

[xxbulletwingsxx.livejournal.com]

Great Stuff!

The second one is so adorable and what can I say about the first?

Just.. beautiful. Beautiful.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Aww! *hugs you hard* Thank you so much!

[fyrie.livejournal.com]

*twitches* 15 minuts after reading the first drabble, I threw together this. I know nothing of Japanese art and its just a basic sketch, but gyah! Stop giving me images!

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

OH! Oh, my goodness, I did not expect THIS! Eee, that's so very Snape, I can see it! I freaking love this; I so adore AU fanart! What a beautiful framing, and the mountain and the pagoda and the tree! Thank you SO much!!!!

[waccawheels.livejournal.com]

"Yes. Yours."

I survived this week to read this.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Waaaah! Oh, you make me giggle so much. ^_^

[fierceglow.livejournal.com]

I love the first one. Severus being all calm and deliciously suave. And Lucius lying in-between the white blossoms stained with blood....beautiful!

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Ooh, I'm glad that image came across for you. ^_^

[cluegirl.livejournal.com]

My favorite is still the first one, but that might just be because my mind animated the whole thing.

So don't be surprised if you get another 'now look what you made me do' post from me...you...you bad influence, you!

And I'm still giggling over the second one.

And heh. Context. Aheh heh.

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Oh, I just love being that kind of bad influence on you! Yay yay yay!

Hee. Thanks muchly!

[gothikmaus.livejournal.com]

Ooh, Japan. I love Japan and I love fics where Snape kills Lucius, so double yay! As usual, I liked all three drabbles, but the third one...

well, sometimes you just had to get certain things from context, right?

*giggle*

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Hee! I usually don't like to write Snape/Lucius where one's going to kill the other--because I imagine that's exactly what's going to happen canonically!--but sometimes the theme demands it. Glad you liked these, thank you!

[twistingflame.livejournal.com]

I love the imagery in the first - cherry blossoms really are inspiringly gorgeous. And the other two made me giigle like mad. ::loffs::

[amanuensis1.livejournal.com]

Ooh, thank you! Imagery and laughs. Now I'm happy that these came out in that combination. ^_^