Ah, nah, just kidding. I couldn't actually think of anything. I don't think I could put my finger on anything, because as far as I'm concerned, if the story's any good, I won't be able to tell who wrote it. I hate glimpsing an author hiding behind the narrator's skirts; stuff that screams "Fabula wrote this!" could also be defined as "sucky stuff." Although, as far as the sentence thing goes, I do like the way you plot sentences, and the frequent and elegant use of parallelisms.
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Ah, nah, just kidding. I couldn't actually think of anything. I don't think I could put my finger on anything, because as far as I'm concerned, if the story's any good, I won't be able to tell who wrote it. I hate glimpsing an author hiding behind the narrator's skirts; stuff that screams "Fabula wrote this!" could also be defined as "sucky stuff." Although, as far as the sentence thing goes, I do like the way you plot sentences, and the frequent and elegant use of parallelisms.